Under the Gods

09 Nov

This was from a challenge in an anthology I am writing.  The challenge was to write a poem with the similar comparison of “seen from above” and “when you get down” as used by Louis MacNeice in his poem “Under the Mountain“.  This was my poem, enjoy.

Seen from above
The city lights flicker
With the waning moon

Seen from above
Our lifes spent hidden
To keep them guessing

Seen from above
A still frame surrounds
Those draped in black

But when you get down
The city nervously shifts
Endless with each sun rise

When you get down
Life is always on line
Forever putting on a show

And when you get down
The coffin bears a reflection
Down … where … we be long


Posted by on Friday 9th November, 2012 in Challenge, Poetry


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3 responses to “Under the Gods

  1. bubblytee

    Friday 9th November, 2012 at 12:40 pm

    Its good to see you writing again.

    You havent lost your impressive skills 🙂

    • withheldindarkness

      Friday 9th November, 2012 at 1:13 pm

      Thanks for the kind comment, and inspiration has really been coming quite quick and fast of late. Seems to be the story of my life 😛

  2. jiggetyblog

    Saturday 10th November, 2012 at 9:39 am

    I really liked the turn in the last phrase “where… we be long”.


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