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Brownie Nights

26 Sep

Wrote this little goodnight story for my children. They enjoy it, hopefully you do too.

The sun descends ‘neath the land,
Fear not for brownies are at hand
To keep the peace at night
Whilst in bed you sleep tight.

Hidden to sleepy lids, now closed
Dancing and singing, funny faces posed.
Now close those eyes and sleep,
The brownies wander tonight, safe you’ll keep.

They’ll take but a small token
An odd sock, evidence of their pokin’
So I kiss you goodnight now
A missing sock when you wake and you’ll know.

The brownies wandered whilst you slept,
Safely in your bed that they kept.

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4 Comments

Posted by on Wednesday 26th September, 2012 in Poetry

 

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4 responses to “Brownie Nights

  1. bubblytee

    Wednesday 26th September, 2012 at 9:29 pm

    LOL @ missing sock…ha, now i know where all those odd ones are held at…at the brownie lodge….

    cute story 🙂

    thank u for stopping by 🙂

     
  2. withheldindarkness

    Thursday 27th September, 2012 at 9:37 am

    Decided on the odd sock because the kids always find just one sock, that way they may think so truth to the tale. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting.

     
  3. bryteline

    Tuesday 2nd October, 2012 at 3:00 pm

    The content is really good – faerie land imposing itself upon the realm of mortals – but the language feels like it predates 1780. There’s no reason you cannot express these concepts, give life to these images, with vernacular. So why did you choose to use archaic English?

     
    • withheldindarkness

      Tuesday 2nd October, 2012 at 3:22 pm

      Probably due to me also writing a fantasy story at the moment, which is based on Old English. Originally was also written to act like a story told in the book, but instead went with Paěter’s Guardians for the book. I was thinking of sitting down with the kids and reworking this piece to be a bed time story for them (with them drawing the pictures). So probably will “modernise” the language more then, make it a bit more story-ish too (as many modern poets seem to prefer to incorporate elements of prose more in poetry than me too – which probably gives it that “older” feel to the language too. Thanks for commenting.

       

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